English Writing Assessment: Chocolate Factory

The red brick door swiftly swung open on the prompt of the man with the purple suit and the bowtie, letting me and the world-renowned chocolatier in (and the buzz of the machines inside out) before becoming flush with the rest of the wall again. Once I took a step inside I could tell why it was easy to become lost forever here; the vast walls -adorned with the finest of chocolates and sweets- extended far above, beyond, and below what the human eye could see. It was clear that this place and this man contained secrets and wealth far greater than than the rest of the world would ever have or know. The very conspicuous purple-suited man -known to the world as Mr.Wonka-, kept a brisk, steady pace with me following a few meters behind. He kept this up for a couple minutes as we passed dozens, no, hundreds of odd machines labeled things like “Never-ending Gum”, “Levitating Fudge”, “Living Gummy Lollies”, or “Augustus Flavored Gloop” all of which were decorated with vibrant paints and eccentric patterns. He then stopped at a particular one. This one had no label above it, nor did it have any bright decors, and yet just the mysteriousness of it made it the most interesting one in the room. A red blinking light flickered to green as it dinged once, and then Mr.Wonka beckoned me forwards to pull the right-most lever down. The machine responded to this with a huff and a puff, as well as a gust of steam, before spitting out a candy bar in a wrapper, of which I assumed was meant for me. The bar read “Willie Wonka’s Secret Logic Defying Candy Bar”, with a asterisk advising “CAUTION: DO NOT LET ANYONE ELSE SEE OR USE THIS BAR. DO NOT TAKE ON AN EMPTY STOMACH”, and on the underside said “If you are unsatisfied with your product we will refund or replace it free of charge”. It seemed ironic to me that a product which would likely never leave this factory for fear of it being put into the wrong hands would have this note on it. Nevertheless, I unwrapped the bar and took a generous bite to see what mystical powers this bar would grant me.

Attention, reader: the remainder of this story is classified and has been redacted in the interest of keeping the information of Mr.Wonka and this chocolate bar safe from the public.

The Banned Word Challenge: Night Time

Task: Describe the scene from your bedroom window in the middle of the night without using any of the banned words.

I stared through the glass skylight at the unending expanse outside, which would appear blank had it not been littered with many little white dots that brought light into the room. Several green bars nearby indicated to me that time had progressed well past the fall of the day, and that the next day had already begun.

5 Minute Think

“Is love an invention created by humans?”

Yes and no. The definition of love was created by humans, making it a human invention, but the feelings we associate as love have always been there, making love a discovery. Other animals also love just like humans.

Romeo and Juliet Act 3 Scene 1 Quote: Black Fate

“This day’s black fate on moe days doth depend, This but begins the woe others must end.” -Romeo, Act 3, Scene 1, Romeo and Juliet

This talks about how the tragedy that happened today will affect the future, and how this is only the beginning of the woe (distress) that must be stopped.

The black fate refers to the death of Mercutio, and “…moe (more) days doth (does) depend” tells us that this day’s events will affect the days to come.

5 Minute Think

“Is a white sheet of paper more blank than a black sheet of paper?”

To play the race card in this one, no because that’s racist. Would you say a white man is more blank than a black man?

mic drop Rommie out.

5 Minute Think

“If I’m being kind to you but you think I’m being horrible, am I being kind or not?”

This is a difficult question to answer considering that both being kind and being horrible is subjective. The person who you are talking to should be the judge of whether you are being nice or not, based on how your actions make them feel.

This is your online portfolio

Hello and welcome to your personal online journal.

This platform has been created to enhance and enrich your learning at Mount Aspiring College. Its purpose is to provide you with an audience for your work (or work-in-progress) and you have the choice (by altering the ‘visibility’ of your posts) of whether your work on here is visible to the world, or only to your teacher.

Anything you post here in the public domain represents you and thus it’s important that you take care with that decision, but don’t be afraid to publish your work – as the feedback you may get from people at home, your peers and people from around the internet is only likely to enhance it.

Remember you can always access your class blog and all manner of resources through the Department of English main website – and by all means check out the sites of your peers to see what they’re getting up to as well.

If you have any questions for me, an excellent way to get an answer is to create a new private post on this journal. I am notified of any new posts and will reply swiftly to any queries.

Make the most of, and enjoy this new freedom in your English learning.



Chris Waugh